Jena, your poem is a poignant reflection on change, resilience, and the cycles of life, vividly portrayed through the lens of nature and personal observation.
The first section opens with a serene depiction of daily life. Phrases like "The sun rose and kissed the holly tree" and "recalling the robins, wrens, and chickadees to song" paint a vivid, tranquil picture, evoking the gentle beauty of nature in awakening. The detailed observations of the Swiss cheese plant and the cats lounging in sunlit comfort suggest a deep familiarity and connection with one's surroundings.
However, the ordinary is juxtaposed with the subtly disruptive: "the stink of leaf blowers passing gas," contrasting the natural serenity with human intrusions. This hints at a deeper underlying tension between the natural world and human presence.
Transitioning to the second section, the poem takes a philosophical turn. "The tissue paper sheets of beliefs, stretched between frames of assumptions" metaphorically suggests how fragile and vulnerable our perceptions and understandings of the world can be. The imagery of the storm whispering "ocean-scented secrets to the trees" beautifully captures the idea of nature communicating profound truths beyond human comprehension.
The monarch butterfly's transformation is a central metaphor in this section. It symbolizes the process of profound change, highlighting both the vulnerability and the inherent strength in transformation. The description of the butterfly's metamorphosis, from climbing to the creation of the chrysalis, is laden with metaphors for personal growth, the pain of change, and the hope for renewal.
The final section, "Emergence," speaks to the uncertainty and unpredictability of life's outcomes. The phrase "It’s all a total crapshoot" strikes a note of frustration, acknowledging that despite struggles and transformations, nothing is guaranteed. Yet, this section also embodies awe and admiration for the resilience of life, as seen in the butterfly's emergence and tentative first flight.
The butterfly's acceptance of the speaker's finger and its subsequent flight symbolizes trust, courage, and the leap of faith required to embrace change. The speaker's mixed feelings – frustration, awe, and wonder – reflect the complex emotions associated with witnessing and experiencing growth and transformation.
The poem masterfully weaves together observations of nature with deep emotional and philosophical introspection. It speaks to the universal experience of change, the pain and beauty of growth, and the awe-inspiring resilience found in the natural world. Through its vivid imagery and thoughtful metaphors, the poem invites readers to reflect on their own journeys of transformation and the delicate balance of life's constants and uncertainties.
I've been sitting on this poem since the 23rd. not sure if I should publish it. It feels a bit raw and vulnerable, which I suppose is the point, but oh boy talk about a leap of faith - lol.
It makes me very happy to know my words touched you. Many thanks for all your support and encouragement.
I'm a year behind you - turned 67 in December. Happy Birthday to you!
I love this poem so much. You paint with words, Jena. Beautiful, rich, accessible ones. And I particularly love the bits of humor ("lavender on steroids")! One thing I think is missing: you have parts II and III, but I don't think part I is there. I could have missed it with my aging eyes. If I did, please forgive me.
I hope you will. The more openhearted and insightful people we have writing and creating stories the better. They are our hope for a better future, IMHO. Be brave ;-)
Jena, your poem is a poignant reflection on change, resilience, and the cycles of life, vividly portrayed through the lens of nature and personal observation.
The first section opens with a serene depiction of daily life. Phrases like "The sun rose and kissed the holly tree" and "recalling the robins, wrens, and chickadees to song" paint a vivid, tranquil picture, evoking the gentle beauty of nature in awakening. The detailed observations of the Swiss cheese plant and the cats lounging in sunlit comfort suggest a deep familiarity and connection with one's surroundings.
However, the ordinary is juxtaposed with the subtly disruptive: "the stink of leaf blowers passing gas," contrasting the natural serenity with human intrusions. This hints at a deeper underlying tension between the natural world and human presence.
Transitioning to the second section, the poem takes a philosophical turn. "The tissue paper sheets of beliefs, stretched between frames of assumptions" metaphorically suggests how fragile and vulnerable our perceptions and understandings of the world can be. The imagery of the storm whispering "ocean-scented secrets to the trees" beautifully captures the idea of nature communicating profound truths beyond human comprehension.
The monarch butterfly's transformation is a central metaphor in this section. It symbolizes the process of profound change, highlighting both the vulnerability and the inherent strength in transformation. The description of the butterfly's metamorphosis, from climbing to the creation of the chrysalis, is laden with metaphors for personal growth, the pain of change, and the hope for renewal.
The final section, "Emergence," speaks to the uncertainty and unpredictability of life's outcomes. The phrase "It’s all a total crapshoot" strikes a note of frustration, acknowledging that despite struggles and transformations, nothing is guaranteed. Yet, this section also embodies awe and admiration for the resilience of life, as seen in the butterfly's emergence and tentative first flight.
The butterfly's acceptance of the speaker's finger and its subsequent flight symbolizes trust, courage, and the leap of faith required to embrace change. The speaker's mixed feelings – frustration, awe, and wonder – reflect the complex emotions associated with witnessing and experiencing growth and transformation.
The poem masterfully weaves together observations of nature with deep emotional and philosophical introspection. It speaks to the universal experience of change, the pain and beauty of growth, and the awe-inspiring resilience found in the natural world. Through its vivid imagery and thoughtful metaphors, the poem invites readers to reflect on their own journeys of transformation and the delicate balance of life's constants and uncertainties.
G xo
Wow....that was beautiful Jena. Wow.
I'm so glad it touched you Jennifer. And so grateful for your support. HUGS!
My God, Jena! This WONDERFUL!
I've been sitting on this poem since the 23rd. not sure if I should publish it. It feels a bit raw and vulnerable, which I suppose is the point, but oh boy talk about a leap of faith - lol.
It makes me very happy to know my words touched you. Many thanks for all your support and encouragement.
HUGS!
You are growing as a poet, Jena! Soon you will be thundering as an Avalanche!
LOL....thank you! I'm not one to make a lot of noise usually. We shall see.
I'm a year behind you - turned 67 in December. Happy Birthday to you!
I love this poem so much. You paint with words, Jena. Beautiful, rich, accessible ones. And I particularly love the bits of humor ("lavender on steroids")! One thing I think is missing: you have parts II and III, but I don't think part I is there. I could have missed it with my aging eyes. If I did, please forgive me.
One year behind. It's odd how a single year can make such a difference. I hope your journey into 68 is a fruitful and not too difficult one.
You are right about the numbering. I will add the number. Thank you for catching it.
I'm thrilled you love my writing. It makes all the difference to be seen and heard.
Hugs!
So far it's been a smooth ride. I have a 24-year-old daughter who keeps me on my toes at all times.
One day, I will be brave and start a Substack with my writing. Not ready for that yet, but I get seen and heard on a much smaller level.
I hope you will. The more openhearted and insightful people we have writing and creating stories the better. They are our hope for a better future, IMHO. Be brave ;-)